Hoping
Tonight
Without you
Below the stars
Dreams fill up my head
Wondering if we’ll be
posted by Anonymous @ 9:07 PM
2 comments
Thursday, May 08, 2008
Without you
Below the stars
Dreams fill up my head
Wondering if we’ll be
2 Comments:
I like it! It makes you wonder if you are to be together someday. And who doesn't think about those things at one point or another?
This is good..very hopeful. But your next to the last line (Dreams fill up..) should be in the infinitive. An example would be to have dreams fill my head. However, I think maybe the very last line (the clause) could be a lot stronger. For example clearing my head would bring nothing but anguish. I am not really sure because yours sounds really good.
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